Commanism
Here’s a bit about commas. It’s actually difficult to express grammatical rules systematically and in your own words, so I’ve likely made some mistakes along the way. What follows is less “here are the perfect, utterly true commanist ideals that I strive to embody” and more “here’s what I think that I’m doing when I write.”
Still. I know a lot of it’s correct. And I know a lot of other people’s commas are just… wrong. So here goes. We begin where we should always begin — in the middle.
I. Appositive nouns in the middle of a sentence.
A pair of appositive commas set off a noun or noun phrase that in effect renames a thing you’ve just finished naming. The second naming isn’t the grammatical noun in the sentence. Typically the second naming is just an elegant way to give more information to the reader without resorting to a another standalone declarative sentence:
My husband, the love of my life, is an aerospace engineer.
The proper inference to draw from them is that the one thing is the other thing, and vice versa. If you don’t mean to assert that, then don’t use appositive commas. In particular don’t use them like this:
Johns Hopkins history professor, Angus Burgin, will speak tomorrow.
I know for a fact that Burgin isn’t all alone at my alma mater. If he were, we should put the word “The” at the start of the sentence, while leaving the commas in place. In the real world, both commas should be deleted. “Johns Hopkins history professor” is not functioning as a noun phrase here, but as a modifier of title, much like the word “President” functions in the sentence “President Barack Obama will speak about gun control.”
Academic titles tend toward the long and highfalutin, particularly when we speak of endowed chairs, but in this respect they should still put their pants on one leg at a time just like the rest of us. As parts of speech, I prefer to treat them as modifiers of title. This then is correct:
Harry C. Black Professor of History Philip Morgan has written…
While to my ear this is technically correct but a bit pretentious:
The Harry C. Black Professor of History, Philip Morgan, has written…
It makes the title seem more or greater than the man who holds it. If for some reason you wish to place emphasis on the title, you may, and this is how you should do it. But generally you probably shouldn’t. It’s not the title who has written anything. It’s the man.
II. Appositive commas at the beginning.
We can also begin a sentence with an appositive — that is, with the second, descriptive naming, rather than with the naming that is serving as the noun part of the sentence:
An intellectual historian, Angus Burgin has written a fascinating book about F.A. Hayek.
We should exercise discretion in which thing we would prefer to function as the noun and which as the appositive. We signal that deliberate choice with a combination of word order and commas. That’s what they do. That’s how they’re supposed to work. It thus expresses the same idea as the just-quoted sentence if we write:
Angus Burgin, an intellectual historian, has written a fascinating book about F.A. Hayek.
…albeit with a slightly different emphasis. But the following would be both different and grammatically wrong:
Angus Burgin, an intellectual historian has written a fascinating book about F.A. Hayek.
…because the comma makes it quite unclear what function “Angus Burgin” performs in the sentence.
III. From appositive to introductory.
Note that when we move from general to specific, and when we’re not asserting a one-to-one identity, we should not use any commas at all:
American chess grandmaster Bobby Fischer won the world championship in 1972.
“American chess grandmaster” is an adjective, in effect, much like “Johns Hopkins history professor” has been just previously. It describes Fischer, but also a more general group of players. No commas should be used. And yet keep in mind:
The greatest American chess player of all time, Bobby Fischer, won the world championship in 1972.
No other Americans have ever been as strong as Fischer. The identity is exact — and appositive — and we use commas to say so.
But now consider:
In 1972, chess grandmaster Bobby Fischer won the world championship.
That’s an introductory element. Often, introductory elements are used to express time or circumstances. When the time or circumstances are specific or of long description, a comma is typically in order. Brief or very familiar introductory elements don’t always need commas. But unusual or lengthy ones generally do. Much of this is a matter of judgment.
But there are limits. “But” and “And” are so familiar as introductory elements that they should never take commas at all unless they constitute the first of two or more introductory elements in a complex set of them. For many other introductory elements, it’s okay to let your ear be the guide.
However, “however” is a special case. It has two possible functions at the start of a sentence. One is to indicate a qualification that applies to the sentence just before it. In that case you use a comma. However, however can also mean “in whatever way.” If that’s what you mean, do not use a comma. However you use the word, be sure the comma is correct, and remember that what distinguishes the two forms of “however” is the comma.
The comma of introductory material is absolutely necessary when you use introductory material that might otherwise throw your readers off. “And” and “But” are at the easy end of the continuum. But, and I will insist upon it, this surely is near the other end:
If you absolutely must write sentences like these, use a comma.
You’ll note a lot of additional clunk if you imagine the sentence without the comma.
Of course, there’s plenty of clunk there in the first place. It’s almost as if the writer began with one sentence, got lost in the middle, and finished up by writing a different sentence entirely.
The comma for introductory material forestalls any such untoward implications. Yet having to rely on it may itself be a warning sign. Too many merely introductory words before a comma will make for confusion; too many sentences that begin with introductory matter will make for ponderous reading. If either occurs, consider a rewrite for elegance.
Is this a manifesto?Report
I dunno, but he is making a bold statement with that tag that didn’t get closed.Report
Is this, the post that you’ve just published, which is the one to which I am replying, a manifesto?Report
This appears to be a comman question from regular commanters.Report
Punctuation Marksism.Report
Beat me to it.Report
Thank you for this. I have comma problems. Nice to have the straight dope.Report
straight dope
Is that an oxymoron?Report
I use commas where I want the reader to imagine that I would stop for a beat. I use elipses where I want the reader to imagine that I would stop for a breath.
It’s not syntax: It’s stage direction.Report
Here here. I write like I speak.Report
Isn’t it “hear, hear”?Report
Not when Kazzy says it.Report
As I tell my kids, our language is stupid because it has words in it that sound the same and sometimes even look the same but with meanings that have nothing to do with each other so it is totally understandable if they never learn to read.Report
Aren’t there languages in which basically every word (note: exaggerated) sounds exactly the same? Like Chinese or Japanese? I’m just glad we don’t have a million declensions like Latin.Report
Chinese is tonal, ever word sounds different. Japanese/Romance languages tend to make a lot of words sound alike, simply because they use fewer sounds than we do (also, fewer consonant clusters)Report
I always say, if something’s hard, it’s not worth doing.Report
That’s not what she said.Report
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I guess you can’t give them the ribald quote on the “purity” of the English people.Report
Perhaps it depends if it’s writing here on this blog or something we’re should list to carefully.Report
listen, not list.Report
Indeed. If you write the way you speak, it’ll mostly make sense.
Unless you’re me.Report
Awesome.Report
Do you speak like you write? With snorts, giggles, chuckles, shrugs, and other physical mannerisms included? Aerobic, that.Report
yup. I like to be an energetic person. I’m not quite… Italian in my gesturing. But I have been known to use airquotes, smirks, guffaws, and all of that. I find it helps if I write them down, to communicate my general mood/context.Report
I guess you are inviting responses from the commatariat,
Are you afraid of losing your position at Cato for this bold endorsement of commanism?
What does a dictatorship of the Oxfordiat look like?
Thank you, I will be here all week. Don’t forget to tip your waiter.Report
I assume this is obligatory:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P_i1xk07o4gReport
comma comma comma com coma.
Comma usage is, I think, a personal reflection of one’s writing style. Sometimes, without knowing why, we use them to syncopate what we say, to put breath — to breath life — into our writing. Commas can transform the written word into the spoken when they help the reader hear your voice. They pace the flow, the rock creating eddies in the stream. But, sometimes, they can, get in the way, diverting the stream of communication to some place we don’t intend it to flow and sometimes their lack confuses the reader and discourage them from continuing to read.
Without the comma, and the semicolon and em-dash, too, it would be impossible to write run-on sentences; something my high-school English teacher, Miss Larrabee, tried to discourage — rather unsuccessfully, in my case — for I recall the day I took a stack of books to her, all from her recommended reading list, and pointed out the a few the many run-on sentences running through their pages; and to which she replied, “When you can write as well, you too, can use run-on sentence without having your papers covered in red ink and points taken from your grade; but since that day had not arrived, and I very much doubt it ever will, you will learn to refrain from writing run-on sentences, or you will see red in your grade.” She failed to break the habit, and I continued to run on, thanks to the humble comma.
There’s nothing like a little Strunk and White to shine light on the comma. Or Miss Larrabee, of whom I still live in fear. And this fine essay, Jason, thank you. Though words like ‘apositive’ still leave me quivering with ignorance and fear that she’s got that damned red pen ready to scour the urge to write from my soul.Report
Loving would be easy if your colors were like my dreams.Report
Considering he’s English, it’s probably ‘colours’.Report
The extraneous ‘u’ is out doing community service after falsely reporting a burglary.Report
Took me a half-hour to write that, and I still screwed it up.
I’ve no business writing.Report
Dude, I thought it was great.Report
Thank you.
Inspired by your stage direction, you know.
But, ‘Dude?’Report
“Dudette” is contraindicated by the LoOG style manual. Hence, “Dude” is now deemed gender-neutral.Report
That I like. But I always hated constructions like ‘mail person’ instead of mailman, figuring the word ‘woman’ has a ‘man’ in it, plus some ‘wow’ factor.Report
rofl. it’s only german that uses “RadioOperator” Then again, they do LOVE LONG words.Report
I sometimes call Maribou “Dude”.Report
From what I’ve read of her here, both from you speaking of her and her own thoughtful words, I’d call her Goddess. But dude’s close enough, if you throw in a comma or two.Report
Aw, shucks.Report
My gig working for a state legislative committee, where I wrote amendments to amendments to committee reports, ruined my sense of punctuation. After a while one got over the inherent wrongness of finishing a line with something like this: ,”;”.””.Report
That’s why reading laws, as they appear on the books, gives me the heebeejeebees, too.
Is there an actual reason for that craziness?Report
Well, at one point there was. Amendments and committee reports are instructions that tell the people who enroll changes how to modify a bill. Things are going to get weird here, so I’ll use >In document A, page B, line C, strike “Text” and substitute “Replacement text”.,”.,”;<. A second committee isn't allowed to modify the bill because there may be no official document where the first committee's changes have been enrolled; they can only modify the first committee's report. Every time a report gets modified, there's the opportunity to nest the quotes and pick up some more punctuation at the end of a string. On the good side, such as it is, back in the days before data bases and word processors, the rules made it possible to (a) reconstruct the language of the bill at every point in the process if necessary and (b) identify which committee had made every change to the language.
I worked for the budget and appropriations committees. We got the bills last, and were writing modifications to reports that might have been changed multiple times already — so quotes and other punctuation nested three or four levels deep. My previous career involved a variety of programming languages, so arbitrary punctuation and formatting rules didn’t bother me. By my third session, I was one of the go-to people for the question, “Did I get the punctuation in this report and/or amendment right?”
IMO, there is no organization as hidebound and reluctant to change procedures as a state legislature :^)Report
That didn’t work very well. Server processing removed a variety of > symbols.Report
Still, I think you get the idea of how the punctuation marks piled up.Report
I’ve had to read those beasts to report on them.
It is now no wonder to me that so many reporters don’t bother, and we discuss the who’s up/who’s down in the process instead of the process.
Thank you, you’ve cleared some very mysterious happenings up for me.Report
Nice bit of work. Too often, such advice comes across as Grammar Nazism. This wasn’t
I have my own thoughts on the subject. Read a sentence aloud, work out where you’d put in a breath and don’t hesitate to put a comma there.
The bits about Angus Burgin: without presuming to correct you, when I’m confronted with someone’s name in the context of their honorifics, I find out how they describe themselves in their LinkedIn or on their university CV.
Dr. Angus Burgin, Associate Professor of History at Johns Hopkins University will speak on the topic of free markets during the Great Depression tomorrow night at 9 PM at Gilman Hall.
Always err on the side of correctness with anyone’s titles. Easy enough to get right and embarrassing to get wrong.
I get the point you’re trying to make in Angus Burgin, an intellectual historian, has written a fascinating book about F.A. Hayek. Trouble is, the descriptive phrase wants to be its own sentence. Furthermore, the sentence reads tighter by saying Angus Burgin has written a fascinating book about F.A. Hayek. Keep the verb and object as close as possible. For some reason, however true it might be to say “Angus Burgin is an intellectual historian” complimenting the person and not the thing always reads as fulsome panegyric. But were I to say:
“Angus Burgin has written a new book, The Great Persuasion: Reinventing Free Markets since the Depression, now available from Harvard University Press, a fascinating intellectual history of how free market thinkers have adapted to global economic crises.”
… I haven’t so much created a run-on sentence as made every comma chunk work on its own behalf.Report
Excellent Jason. This was a fun read. And informative too. I have comma problems. I’m all over the map. The reason, I think, is that I’m an inherently lazy writer. I don’t like the process, embodying a permutation of the old maxim that I didn’t have enough time to write something shorter. So, I resort to … short cuts… that help make the point more succinctly – oftentimes in adroitly! – with a minimum of effort. And for some reason, that means far too many commas. (But, I have been getting better at this, lately, somewhat, if, for no other reason, than eliminating key strokes.)
Your prose is a marvel to me. As is Blaise P’s, Tod’s, and James Hanley’s. Lots of people at this sight, actually. It’s clean, clear, precise, a joy to read.Report
A high school English teacher likened commas to speedbumps. If given the choice I prefer to avoid using them, but sometimes I’ll sprinkle them liberally on my prose if I think something I’ve written is worth slowing down to take notice of.Report
If your audience doesn’t live in the world of endowed chairs
The Harry C. Black Professor of History, Philip Morgan, has written…
is superior to
Harry C. Black Professor of History Philip Morgan has written…
because it doesn’t make the reader stop in mid-sentence to recalibrate “Harry C. Black'”‘s role as title rather than dude.Report
It gets even more confusing if he is this guy.Report
Interesting. I was taught the rule wherein the only title preceding a given name were either current military rank or the honorifics Dr. and Rev. etcetera. All other titles followed the given name.
Sir Ernest Henry Shackleton, CVO, OBE, FRGS.
Lt. Gen. James L. Terry, Commander U.S. Army V Corps.
Jeffrey R. Immelt, CEO of General Electric Company.
It’s been my observation most people with a Ph.D. don’t use the “Dr.” title regularly. Perhaps that’s because it’s often conflated with physicians, though Lord knows there are plenty of MDs with Ph.Ds.
Stephen William Hawking, CH, CBE, FRS, FRSA, former Lucasian Professor of Mathematics at Cambridge University. BA (Hons.) Oxon. Ph.D. Cantab. In this case, the preceding Sir seems superfluous. The Lucasian Professor would always follow his titles in my ordering of things.
Drew Gilpin Faust, 28th president of Harvard University and Lincoln Professor of History in Harvard’s Faculty of Arts and Sciences. Somehow the honorific “Dr.” seems a bit fussy. I’d prefer to write “Dr. Faust” for she does indeed have a Ph.D. — but she’s well-enough known under her own name as a published author.
Perhaps you’ve seen otherwise. Maybe I’ve been doing it wrong all these years, heh.Report
Also,
Angus Burgin, an intellectual historian has written a fascinating book about F.A. Hayek.
is an incomplete sentence. It ‘s missing a required modifier:
Angus Burgin, an intellectual historian has written a fascinating book about F.A. Hayek (it’s not just a libertarian wank-fest. Honestly!).Report